有时候，我们本来已经很好地表述了细节，却不继续表述别的细节，而是忍不住跳出来向读者直白重申一下，似乎是为了确保读者真的“明白了”我们前面的表述。
例1，
她低头看了一眼挽着她胳膊的那只大手，眼里闪着愤怒的凶光。
“眼睛冒光”已经显示出她的愤怒，“愤怒地”纯属多余，完全可以删掉。
重写:
她低头看了一眼挽着她胳膊的那只大手，两眼冒光。
例2，
贝蒂皱起了眉头。“我不知道这是不是一个好主意。”她显然不相信。
她皱起的眉头和她的措辞等细节已经表明她不相信，所以不需要最后跳出来直白重申那最后一句。相信我们的表述技巧，相信读者只需从我们表述的部分就能明白我们想说什么。
重写:
贝蒂皱起了眉头。“我不知道这是不是一个好主意。”
Sometimes we’ve beautifully shown something, but instead of moving on, we add a tell, as if to make sure that readers really “got it.”
For example 1,
She glanced down at the big hand on her arm, her eyes flashingwith anger.
The flashing eyes show her anger already. We might as well just cut the “with anger”.
Rewrite:
She glanced down at the big hand on her arm, her eyes flashing.
For example 2,
Betty’s brow wrinkled. “I don’t know if that’s such a good idea.”She obviously wasn’t convinced.
The wrinkled brow and her words show that she’s not convinced, so we don’t need to add outright that last sentence. Trust our showing skills and trust our readers to get what we’re trying to say just from the details we have shown.
Rewrite:
Betty’s brow wrinkled. “I don’t know if that’s such a good idea.”
