What is your name? ” is a question most frequently asked when people meet for the first time. But for me, it was the first challenge I encountered as an international student in Ireland.
The pronunciation system of the Chinese language is quite different from that of English. For native speakers of English, some Chinese words are rather difficult to pronounce. My given name Qiuyu (秋雨), for instance, happened to be a great challenge for many of them. Every time I gave a self-introduction, I had to explain how to pronounce my name at least five times, yet they still could not say it the way I did.
Once in a lecture, the professor tried repeating my name after me over and over in front of thirty classmates. I really did not know whether I should continue correcting him or simply drop the matter. I feared that my classmates might grow tired of my efforts or even lose patience with me. After all, I did care about how others would think of me. I realized that if I didn’t stop, the entire lecture would be ruined. “It’s okay, professor,” I shrugged (耸肩). The awkward moment ended with the class erupting into laughter. I forced a smile, unsure how to respond further.
After that incident, I stopped acting as a “Chinese teacher.” Instead of correcting others when they were struggling to pronounce my name, I just smiled and nodded approvingly. This approach spared me the discomfort of having to over-explain. However, I soon found that by doing so, I might be losing something more important: the opportunity to share a small part of my cultural identity.
第一段
In a class discussion, I was invited to explain the meaning of my name.
第二段
Many of my classmates got interested and came up to me after class.
本篇文章的主旨大意是: 在爱尔兰的一名中国留学生,因为周围的同学和老师不能正确发出他中国名字的音,而多次感到尴尬,后来就放弃纠正学生正确发音的机会,但同时也失去了分享自己文化身份的机会。
续写的内容是在一次班级讨论中,作者被邀请去解释自己的名字的含义。紧接着第二段,学生对他的解释很感兴趣并围了上来。
知道文章的主旨大意后,我们就要谋求文章情节的发展。紧接着第一段开始后,肯定最主要的内容就是要解释他名字"秋雨"是什么,可能有的人说"秋雨"就是秋天的雨,一句话的事情有什么好写的。这里就要看学生本身的知识储备和个人素质了。
就拿秋雨来说,有的人就说了,我出生在秋天一个下雨的早上,所以父母就给我起名叫秋雨,同时秋雨这个词代表父母给我的美好祝愿。这样写好像还不够,有的同学接着又说了,秋雨这个词语在中国古诗词里出现,比如某个诗人的某首诗里某一句,代表中国文化的深邃。
当然,还有学生会说我父母很喜欢的一位作家名字叫做余秋雨,所以就给我起了这个名字。这些解释都还算说得过去的。
还有的学生会说,秋雨是我国二十四节气的一部分,代表着丰收和喜悦。虽然,秋雨并不是二十四节气的一部分,但是还是围绕秋雨这个名字的含义在解释,都没有问题,他这个大的逻辑是正确。
更有甚者,有的学生说秋雨是一名爱尔兰人,因为他妈妈对中国文化感兴趣,一次去中国去旅行,感受到秋天雨中的美景,所以给他起名叫秋雨。按照咱们对文章的理解,他就没有看清楚作者是一个在爱尔兰的中国交换生。
咱们说到现在,无论是自己出生在秋天,引用古诗,用二十四节气还是说秋雨是外国人,都是在解释秋雨这个名字,这属于大的逻辑是正确的,剩下的都是小细节。
接下来大家看几个实例,看能给打多少分。
第一组,三篇文章篇幅比较短,说明这三个学生的词汇,句式结构和语法知识都是有限的,然后咱们看内容,你觉得哪个分数最高。
第二组,这三篇文章篇幅较长一点,这说明这三名同词汇,语法和句型有一定量的积累,同样,咱们同样看内容,你觉得哪个分数最高。
第一句:先抓住大逻辑,再注意小细节
接下来,第二段学生对我的讲解很感兴趣就围了过来。接下来肯定就围绕学生感兴趣展开,解决原文中的问题。 同学对中国名字很感兴趣,询问能不能给他们也取个中国名字。作者给他们取中国名字,解释其中的文化含义。作者借这个机会再一次交学生发音说他的名字,多次尝试之后终于成功了。有的同学也写自己自此之后创建了许多与中国文化相关的俱乐部'很受学生的欢迎,有的同学因此想去中国旅游。最后升华部分可以写这件解释名字的小事情起到跨文化交际的大作用。
另外,看一下各个分数段,大家还是会注意到,分数越高的文章,文章篇幅相对更长,这里体现不出学生的字体,如果有字体的话,也会看到,同样或者相似内容,字越好分数也就越高。
第二句:还是写长点,字还是写好点
最后,咱们看看高分作文,看看人家好在哪里。
第三句:句型还是多背点
最后,看看专家最后给我们的建议。