【按语】重读多年前一篇旧文，心中不禁涌现几多感概。怀着感恩的心，特收入此处，并尝试翻译全文，不求信达雅，瑾以此怀念曾经的难忘岁月。
在我的成长历程中，给予我指导和帮助的老师们很多，但是沈平老师留给了我最为深刻的印象。是她独具匠心的教诲，让我重新拾回了自信，改变了我一生的轨迹。
1992年，我以优异的成绩升入令人羡慕的县中学。高一时，一方面，我沉浸于初中佼佼者的自我满足中，认为高中课程不过如此；另一方面，县城相对的繁华和新奇把我深深的吸引，大街小巷留下了我驻足观望的身影、游艺厅有着我“浴血奋战”的搏击。怠慢于学业，我得到了应有的下场，高一结束时我的成绩步入班级倒数第八名，年级后五十弱。带着游戏高手、乒乓球王子的“桂冠”和满心的失望，我开始了高二生活。
因为成绩的打击，我对曾经的大学梦几乎不抱幻想。第一次作文讲评课，当沈萍老师步入教室的一瞬间，似乎朝我不经意地看了一眼，深邃的眼神中分明包含着一丝赞叹、几多期许。在我心如鹿撞的忐忑中，沈萍老师宛如天音、沁人心脾的讲课声飘入了我的耳际。“在这次作文讲评中，我想改变一下形式，让同学们听我朗读几篇范文，然后给予你们的评价。先听一下第一篇……”听着作文的开头，我的心怦然一动。没错，这就是我的作文！
还没有享受够第一次作文被朗读的喜悦，沈老师继续说：“我们大家现在来一起分析一下这篇作文在谋篇布局上存在什么缺点？”这声音犹如晴天霹雳，刺痛着我脆弱的神经。但是还没有等同学们发表评论，沈萍老师又接着讲道：“同学们也许会奇怪，今天我为什么第一个念一篇存在问题的作文？当我翻开这篇作文的时候，给我的是眼前一亮的感觉，这位同学一手漂亮的钢笔字深深的吸引了我，仔细读来，文笔清新流畅，文采飞扬。只要稍微把存在的不足加以修正，一定是一篇优秀的作文。同时我也相信，这位同学在各门功课的学习中，成绩都不差。”
听到沈老师这样说，我如沐春风。没有心思听同学们怎样评论我的作文，我心里反复咀嚼着沈老师说的每个字。“包袱”不在，剩下的只有奋进的决心。
后来的日子，受沈老师的影响，我爱上了书法、爱上了学习。也逐渐埋下了要当沈萍老师一样的老师的种子。高考的时候，我以总分全年级第四、语文全年级第一的成绩考入了某学院英语师资专业，总算没有辜负沈老师。
十多个年头了，我也早已是一名英语老师。在教学实践中，沈老师的教学理念深深的影响了我。我告诉我的学生：你们当中没有差生，你们都是最优秀的。
载2006年9月8日 《三秦都市报》
A Few Words Polished Me a Lot
In my growing-up process, there have been many teaches who have rendered me with sincere guidance and help. One of them was Ms Shen, who impressed me the most. It was she who helped me rediscover confidence and corrected my life trajectory.
In 1992, I was enrolled by the County High School, an admiring school because of my excellent performance in the entrance exam. During the first year of my high school study, on one hand, I had been concentrating myself on the complacency as an study leader during the junior high school, regarding that the high school courses were just so so. On the other hand, I had been deeply attracted by the relative prosperity and novelty of the County town. So always on the streets I was watching and in game rooms I was playing electrical games. As a result, I deserved the poor performance in studies. At the end of the first year, my score stepped into the eighth reciprocal place of my class and in the bottom 50 in the whole grade. With game master hand, Pingpang Prince and much disappointment, I began the torment of the second year in high school.
Because of the serious blow arisen from poor study performance, I once gave up fancying entering college. In the first composition evaluation class, when Ms Shen stepped into the classroom, she glanced at me unintentionally, much praise and expect in her eyes. With mentally perturbed mood, her soft and refreshing voice flew into my ears, “In this class, I wanted to change the teaching style. First of all, I will read a few model essays and your comments are requested. Then the first model essay is as follows…”Just listening to the beginning of the essay, I became so surprised that my heart missed a beat. Ah, this was my writing.
Still focusing myself on the first time that my composition had been read in class, I heard Ms Shen continue, “Now all of you are requested to analyze what shortcomings exist in the general layout of this composition.” This sentence, just like a thunderbolt, stabbed my fragile nerve. However, before classmates responded to her question, Ms Shen continued, “You may feel strange why I kicked off the class with an imperfect composition. When I first open the exercise book of this student, the beautiful handwriting shined and impressed me deeply. Reading over, I found the writing demonstrated many features such as smooth cohesion and coherence, nice language. Once the existing faults are corrected, this must be an excellent composition. Meanwhile, I believe that he performed well in the studies of any other subject.”Hearing her commenting words, I felt refreshed as I was bathing in the spring breeze. I mentally ignored how classmates commented on my writing, just digesting her each word. My heart completely unloaded, with just the determination toward advancement inside.
Afterwards, with the influence of Ms Shen, I deeply loved handwriting and studying. I determined to become a good teacher, just like Ms Shen. In the entrance exam for college, my total score ranked forth and Chinese score ranked the first in the grade of my high school. I deserved her efforts and was enrolled by a famous college, majoring in English teaching.
It has been more that ten years since my graduation from high school, I have been an English teacher at a college. Her teaching ideology always affects my teaching practice. I always tell my students: “Among you, there are no poor students. All of you are outstanding.”
Published on Sept 8th, 2006 in “Sanqin Daily”
2013.1.27翻译于那古拉
