Shenzhen In Your Words
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I care not what others think of your works. For me, I just love every single word you have written down. Thanks for your writings, Shenzhen is now calling, for me.
可能在别人看来，你们并不是写得最好的。但对我来说，阅读你们的文章，是一种愉悦的体验，喜欢你们笔下的深圳。或许哪一天想好好转转深圳的时候，我会从你们的文字出发，去感受这座城市。
第一篇文章，来自2班的彭程。这是本次测验90多篇文章中，我读到的最喜欢的一篇之一。你很难相信，这是一篇在小测中写出来的文章，而且还是一个初一的孩子写的。这篇文章放到初三甚至是高中的孩子当中，都能秒掉一片。读彭程的文章，你似乎能感受到，他就站在你面前，把他对深圳的认识娓娓道来。当你以为他要说：“来吧，让我带你在深圳到处转转”的时候，他却又习惯性地用手摸着他的脑袋瓜，略显不好意思地说：“好吧，其实我也只是去过深圳几个比较有名的景点而已。这座城市的魅力，你还是自个儿去发现吧。”
Shenzhen is Calling
To be honest, Shenzhen is really fantastic. It is just like a dark horse.In the last centry, it was just a poor town by the sea in the south of China. But with Deng grandpa's wondeful revolution, it became better and better. It's now a morden city with millions of people and tourists. It's an important harbour too.
I'm terribly sorry that I don't have much experience in travelling. But if you visit Shenzhen, please don't forget to go to the Ping'an Large Building. It is one of the tallest buildings in the world. It has about 100 floors.You can take a lift to the top,and it only takes you 1 minute！When you get to the top, I'm sure that you will enjoy yourself perfectly. If you go there on your birthday, it will be free of charge. You can enjoy views of Shenzhen! Some high technologies here are unbelievable. They may give you the feeling that this is how our future is going to be. When you get a bird-eye view of Shenzhen, you will see an amazing green sea first. That's why the air here is cool and clean.
This city is colorful and busy. The cars and people here are just like water, flowing without any pause. When you come to Shenzhen, you are part of us. Just like what it is said: Come here and you are Shenzhen people. Not just any of you, animals are our friends too, so are the wind, the rain and whatever the nature has given us.
You may now think that I am a good guide for showing you around Shenzhen. Yet frankly speaking, I've just been to a few famous tourist attractions. So you need to explore this dream city by yourself. If you come to Shenzhen, you will have an unforgettable as well as unregrettable experience. Wish you have fun here.
第二篇文章，来自2班的乐怡宸。怡宸的文章，是被作为范文拿到课堂上来讲评的。她的文章，是本次测验90多篇文章中，我认为在文章的结构，段落的起承转合方面做得最好的，几乎是无可挑剔。读她的文章，你能感受到，动笔前，她对整篇文章的谋篇布局已经了然于心。她的逻辑严丝合缝，即便你不认识她，你也能从她的文字中感受到，这是不仅文科好，理科也好啊。
Shenzhen is Calling
Shenzhen is a pretty city which lies in the south of China. It is famous for its quick development.
Many years ago, Shenzhen is just a small village. But after a few years, it becomes a modern city, and it is known as one of the four international cities in China. Shenzhen is hometown to many well-known companies such as The Tencent Company. These companies are making Shenzhen better.
Shenzhen is not only famous for its good business, but also famous for its tall and beautiful buildings. A trip to Shenzhen must include The Ping'an Building. It is around 800 metres tall. If you go to the top, you can find people on the ground like dust and cars like little ants.
Are you tired? Don't worry! The Shenzhen Bay Park is a perfect place to relax. You can lie on the grass, hearing the sound of sea birds and breathing the fresh air.
Want to go shopping? There are over 100 shopping malls in Shenzhen. You can buy everything you want. Some of the shopping malls have cinemas or even skating centres. Spending a whole day in a shopping mall is a nice choice. At night, sometimes you can enjoy the fantastic light show.
Shenzhen, a wonderful city, has everything you want. It is home to everyone. Why not visit Shenzhen this year ?
第三篇文章，来自2班的黎睿。我记得上学期黎睿有在班级分享过他锻炼自己写作能力的经历：在新西兰（应该没记错吧）游学的那一个月，每天都要写一篇作文，然后拿给寄宿家庭的主人批改，修改。就是这么不间断地写了一个月，功力就练就出来了。所以说嘛：Practice make perfect. 黎睿的文章也有他的个人风格，说不太清楚，但我现在基本已经是一读他的文字，就会觉得，嗯...没错，这就是黎睿写的。他的风格跟彭程有点像（不愧是互相欣赏的 good bros），但又不完全一样。你能感受到他文章中流动着的真实情感，又能够捕捉到那些被他精心设计过的写作技巧，他把两者平衡得很好。Ray, it is always a pleasure reading your articles.
Shenzhen is Calling
Shenzhen lies in the south of China. It’s so nice that I can’t describe it completely.
It’s an international city. To be honest, I don’t know a lot about Shenzhen but I prefer going to these two places to staying at home. The first one is the Window of the World. I have drawn a lot of pictures in it and once, I stayed there for at least 12 hours. It’s interesting because there are many places of interest, such as the Eiffel Tower in mini size. Go there and you learn about the world. The other one is the Happy Valley. Wow, if you enjoy exciting things, that will be a perfect place for you. There are Roller Coaster and other things in it. And most importanly, people you meet in it are always enthusiastic and they always help each other.
Talking about Shenzhen, I can’t forget the Bougainvillea glabra. It is the most famous plant in Shenzhen and there is one in my home. It’s beautiful and it is just like an angle smiling at you. You want to know about the animals? You can see every kind of animal in zoos. Just enjoy! About the incects, speaking of which, I have just found a little snail in the fresh vegetable that my mom bought today.
Oh, I forgot to introduce the light show. It’s magical and at night, it lights up the sky, right, left and centre.
What a wonderful city Shenzhen is ! So why not start to plan a journey to Shenzhen now? I wish you a nice trip. See-ya !
第四篇文章，来自2班的朱子文。子文的文字，跟他本人很像，冷静客观，有时候甚至有些许凌厉，不会有太多个人情感的流露，用彭程的话来说：典型的“朱风”，也是属于一读，我就知道是他写的。子文最擅长写的是议论文，在那种类型的文章中，他的个人风格更加明显，下次有机会我们大家可以一起读一读。当所有人都在告诉我们深圳有多少places of interest, advanced technology, shopping malls的时候，只有子文提醒我们：这是一座很“wonderful” 但又很“challenging”的城市，因为这里物价很贵。如果你未来还想继续留在这里，你唯有更加努力! I just couldn't agree more!
Shenzhen is calling
Shenzhen is a modern city. It lies in the south of China.
Shenzhen has a huge number of department stores. People there enjoy the best technology in China. There are also many parks and gardens. For example, the Lixiang Park has fresh air, lovely birds and energetic people. It is a good place for us to build our body. The best place to visit in Shenzhen is The Window To The World. The high and modern buildings light up the sky every night, so you won't feel lonely and dark in this bright city. But the goods here are expensive. Most of them are more expensive than other places. So if we still want to stay there in the future, we must study as hard as we can.
Shenzhen is an amazing city. It is wonderful but challenging. Do you want to have a try?
第五篇文章，来自2班的吴若兮。若兮的写法，在考试中是比较规范且保险的。她的文章结构很清晰，表达非常流畅，看得出能够将背过的课文结构学以致用，同时又加入了自己通过课外学习储备到的一些比较复杂的句式表达，再加上文章几乎没有什么语法错误，这样的作文在考试中也会是高分作文。读她前几段，虽然觉得平平，到读到最后一段 “Shenzhen is home to me. I love this land”，突然觉得心头一暖，你会感受到这个小姑娘对这座城市的热爱。
Shenzhen is Calling
Shenzhen is in the south of Guangdong. It is a city with many beautiful parks and scenery. It is also an international city, so it has a large population.
Shenzhen is famous for The Window to the World. It is a landmark in Shenzhen. Here you will find many places of interest such as the “Great Wall”. But this “Great Wall” isn’t the same as the Great Wall which lies in Beijing. They have different sizes. If you pay a visit here, you can also find the Eiffel Tower. It is smaller than the real one too.
If you like shopping, trust me, you will love this place. Because there are so many department stores. There are some high-tech products too. Such as the light shows. At night, the lighting will light up the whole sky. It will be really unbelievable and fantastic.
Shenzhen is home to me. I love this land. Why not visit Shenzhen now?
第六篇文章，来自2班的陈立恒。立恒的文章，有一个永恒的主题：Games! 凡是能够和game扯上点关系的，他几乎不会落下。哈哈，不愧是立志要成为一家游戏公司CEO的帅气boy。可能也是确实有成为CEO的潜质，读他的文章你会觉得他的文风比较大气，格局比较广，所以他是在这么多篇我改到的文章里面，唯一一个关注到当前社会热点 the COVID-19，并提醒大家，还是等疫情过了再来深圳旅游的。但同时，立恒的文章又有有趣的细节，你看，只有他会吐槽深圳的蚊虫太多，并提醒大家来了深圳记得带好驱蚊水。总之，读他的文章，你会读到一个CEO的格局，你也能读到一个暖男的贴心。
Shenzhen is Calling
Welcome to Shenzhen！It is located in the south of China. It lies on the coast as well.
The Window to the world is one of the most famous places to visit in Shenzhen. Here you will see many famous places from all over the world in mini size. I think the most famous company in Shenzhen is Tencent. Many people in China play online games that developed by Tencent. They are known as a sound "Timi". Although many parents think playing games is bad for their children, I think playing games for a little while is okay.
Shenzhen is not only international, but also beautiful. Lots of animals and plants live in Shenzhen because of its wonderful weather and fresh air. If you want to visit Shenzhen, please don't forget to bring some medicine to cure the stinging caused by the insects. They just like staying in Shenzhen.
If you want to visit Shenzhen, why not pay a visit here right after the end of the COVID-19 ?
以上就是本次英语测验以Shenzhen is Calling为主题，大家创作出来的高分作文。并不是说他们的作文就是完美无瑕的，当然少不了一些小错误，我已做了修改，希望以上这些同学关注自己原文的一些小错误，认真订正，下次避免再出现同类错误。也希望其他同学在欣赏他们的文章的同时，去思考，去行动，勤练笔。你们要知道，他们当中，没有一个人是从一开始就能写出这样的文章的，他们无一不是在背后付出了巨大的努力和练习，才能写到这种程度。你们当中，还有很多是写得相当不错的，期待在我的简书里面，早日出现你们的文章。
