【复盘】英语六级作文(201706的某一篇)V1.0

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【Direction】Suppose you are asked to give advice on whether to major in science or humanities at college, write an essay to sate your opinion. You are required to write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

1【破题】

1. 这是一篇议论文。形式是提建议,它的本质是要写“选择”的影响与意义

2. 结构:第一段说明现象,点明中心;第二段举例论证,分析原因/影响;第三段总结或升华主题。

2【复盘】

● 纠结:题目怎么取?

上网查了一下,得出结论:给定题目就写嘛,不给定题目就不写。

● 审题:感觉自己跑题了

题目要求写如何选择,而我写成了如何重新选择。因此,以后写作之前首先要审题,看清楚题目要求,避免掺杂主观意识。走题目指给你的方向,别跑偏。

● 生疏:一些单词和句子都生疏了

比如:“regret”都忘记怎么拼了; advice不可数(some advice)

3【一些表达在用的时候就是感觉迷糊】

3.1. “提建议”怎么表达

Suggest | I suggest you should choose science as your subject.

suggestion(可数)| make some suggestions as to how to choose a subject.

Advice(/ədˈvaɪs/ 不可数) | I would like to give you some useful advice on/about choosing majors.

Advise(/ədˈvaɪz/ 动词哦) | advise sb to do sth;advise sb of sth;advise sb that..

Propose |  propose that... ; propose doing sth; {Do not say 不要说 ‘propose someone something’. Say 而要说 propose something: He proposed a compromise (NOT 不说 He proposed me a compromise). 他建议和解。}

Proposal(提议、求婚的意思多一些,可数) |  make a proposal提建议; put forward a proposal to do something; approve/accept a proposal同意/接受提议。

3.2. “选专业”怎么表达

Choose a major | There are severalfactors weneed toconsiderwhenchoosingmajor.

Select | select a university major

Find a field |  Try to find a field that you are both good at and like to do.

Elect specialized |  Certainly, elects specialized also to choose segmentations as far as possible, the type of chiasma, the practical specialty.

Declare a major |  I haven't declared a major because I'm afraid to.



4【第一段怎么写】

第一段奠定了行文的方向:

1. 认为学理科更重要,选理科;

2. 认为文科更重要,选文科;

PS: 选择写两种学科都重要虽然很思辨,但因立场不明确,并不好写。因此,可以侧重说某个学科很重要,最后点一下另一种学科也挺重要,找找平衡。

在内容上,一般用2-3句话交代背景、说明问题、引出下文:

Choosing a suitable major really counts for college students. However, some of them don't know how to do it. I would like to give you some useful suggestions.

When pinched between majoring in science or humanities in college, many students find themselves in a dilemma. Personally, the formeris preferable forthe following two reasons.(选自范文)

When it comes tocollege life/contemporary life,there is a simple but thought-provoking question for all students: to major in science or humanities? (选自范文)

5【第二段怎么写】

第二段要结构清晰,言之有料。

版本一,自己写的,强调选专业要跟随自己的兴趣与时代的脚步:

Firstly, try to figure out what you want to be. It is wise to acquaint yourself with some fundamental courses both in science and humanities before you go to university. Then,you may find the field you are interested in. Secondly,if you take an interest in math or engineering, please choose to learn science. Although math and engineering are not easy to master, all of them can polish your logistic thinking.Thirdly, if you are keen on literature, philosophy or linguistic, declaring a major in humanities will be a right choice. In a word, it is advisable for you to choose a major in terms of personal interests and future development.


版本二,摘选自石雷鹏老师微博,很多表达都值得借鉴哦:

Suppose individuals intend to acquire useful knowledge and find a well-paid job, it is advisable for them to choose to major in science. As the competition for jobs has become fiercer than ever today, students need to gain a higher education that can be immediately beneficial for their future job hunting. Therefore, by absorbing useful knowledge and mastering practical skills in science subjects, students can be well-armed during their college life. With a decent academic background, a bachelor’s or master’s degree, and strong practical skills, when science majors graduate and compete in the job market, they are likely to win an advantage over those majoring in humanities and be favored by some state-owned enterprises and international companies.

#插播一句:will与would的三点区别

1. 表示意愿时的区别

will 表示现在的意愿,would 表示过去的意愿:

Go where you will. 你愿到哪里就到哪里。

She asked if I would go with them. 她问我是否愿意同他们一起去。

2. 表示征求意见或提出请求的区别

主要用于第二人称的疑问句中,will 和 would 均可用,would 此时并不表示过去,而表示委婉语气:

Won’t you take off your coat? 你要不要把大衣脱掉?

Will [would] you please post the letter for me? 请帮我寄了这封信好吗?

3. 表示习惯和倾向性的区别

will 表示现在的习惯,would 表示过去的习惯:

This window won’t open. 这扇窗户经常打不开。

When he was a child, he would often go skating. 他小时候经常去滑冰。

would like / would love可视为习语,意为“想要”,其后接名词、代词或不定式:

I would like a cup of tea. 我想要杯茶。

We would love to go with him. 我们想同他一起去。

6【第三段怎么写】

第三段是用来总结与展望的,有很多套路可以使用,比如起到总结作用的"All in all"、"In a word"等,还有万能神句"I, as a college student, am convinced that it is advantageous for students to..."。

All in all, you are supposed to preview some knowledge both in science and humanities and know what you are interested in. Afterwards, combined your interests with the trends, you will find a suitable major.(自己写的)

I, as a college student, am convinced that it is advantageous for students to choose science as their major for their own benefits if they have an opportunity to make a choice.(摘选自石雷鹏老师微博)


7【总结】 一篇应试作文在研究完之后,要思考一下对今后写作的帮助

形式上,这是一篇关于“建议”的作文。很多关于‘“建议”的表达需要掌握,比如:suggest&suggustion,advize&advice,以及propose&porposal(详见标题3.1),以后在写建议信的时候都能用到

内容上,这是一篇关于“选择”的作文。可拓展到选工作、选学校等话题。关于选择的表达有:choose&choice,select&selection,以及decide&decision等(详见标题3.2)

在方向上,可以写选择其中一个方面,并列出1、2、3点原因;也可以列出两者的优点,结合个人情况与时代发展视情况而定,但要注意不要含糊不清。

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