第1题
原文:深化“放管服”改革,优化营商环境。
您的译文:Deepen "streamline-management-service"reform, improve the business enviornment.
评分:70/100
扣分点:
"streamline-management-service" → "streamline administration, delegate power, and improve regulation and services"(“放管服”是固定表述,您的简化译法丢失了“放权”、“监管”等核心含义)(-5分)
enviornment → environment(拼写错误)(-3分)
缺少主语,构成祈使句。在政策语境中,可接受,但更正式的译法是 We should deepen... 或 China will deepen...(-2分)
参考答案:
We will deepen the reform of "streamlining administration, delegating power, improving regulation and upgrading services" and improve the business environment.
第2题
原文:我国新能源车保有量突破2000万辆。
您的译文:The number of China's reservation of new energy vehicles breaks 20 million.
评分:65/100
扣分点:
reservation → stock / number in use(“保有量”指在册/在用数量,不是“预订”)(-5分)
breaks → has exceeded / surpassed(描述已实现的数据,用现在完成时更准确)(-3分)
The number of China's reservation → 语法混乱,应为 The number of new energy vehicles in China(-2分)
参考答案:
The number of new energy vehicles in China has exceeded 20 million.
第3题
原文:会议强调,要坚决守住18亿亩耕地红线。
您的译文:It is stressed on the meeting that we must hold the 1.8 billion mu farmland as a bottomline.
评分:75/100
扣分点:
It is stressed on the meeting → It was stressed at the meeting(介词错误)(-3分)
hold → protect / preserve / hold(“守住”译为 hold 勉强可接受,但 protect 更准确)(-2分)
bottomline → bottom line(通常分写)(-2分)
mu 保留正确,但在正式译文中可加注:1.8 billion mu (approximately 12 million hectares)(不扣分)
参考答案:
It was stressed at the meeting that we must protect the 1.8 billion mu redline for farmland.
第4题
原文:要打通科技成果转化的“最后一公里”。
您的译文:Clear the application way of technological results' transformation.
评分:50/100(不及格)
扣分点:
Clear the application way → 完全不通。Clear 意为“清理/清除”,application way 是中式英语。(-8分)
technological results' transformation → 所有格使用不当,应为 transformation of technological achievements(-4分)
完全漏译“最后一公里”这一核心比喻。(-8分)
参考答案:
We need to remove the "last mile" barriers in the transformation of scientific and technological achievements.
第5题
原文:这是一个人工智能驱动的能够实时分析患者数据的医疗诊断系统。
您的译文:This is an AI-driven medical analysis system that could analyse real-time data of patients.
评分:85/100
扣分点:
medical analysis system → 原文“医疗诊断系统”,漏译“诊断”(diagnostic)(-5分)
that could analyse → could 语气偏弱,原文是陈述事实,用 can 或 that analyzes 更准确(-3分)
整体结构清晰,多重定语处理得当,是本题中表现最好的译文。
参考答案:
This is an AI-driven medical diagnostic system that can analyze real-time patient data.
总分汇总
题号得分主要问题
170“放管服”术语不完整,拼写错误
265“保有量”误译,时态错误
375介词错误,术语可优化
450严重不及格,“最后一公里”完全丢失
585漏译“诊断”,语气词不准确
平均分:69/100
针对性补漏建议
“放管服”必须背熟:这是CATTI高频考点,标准译法为 streamline administration, delegate power, improve regulation and upgrade services,缺一不可。
“最后一公里”是必考比喻:在科技、政策、扶贫等文本中高频出现,标准译法为 the "last mile",动词搭配用 remove barriers to / bridge the gap of。
“保有量”不要译成“reservation”:记住 number in use、stock、fleet size 等正确表达。
介词训练:at the meeting(会议),in the report(报告),on the agenda(议程)。
是否需要针对“放管服”或“最后一公里”再出几道变体题巩固?