【Write or Out】第3次作业题目：
向外国人介绍一样中国特色。
比如普通话的渊源文化和学习方法、比如你的家乡和地标性建筑、比如绿茶婊葛优躺蓝瘦香菇洪荒之力等热词的含义和来龙去脉、比如结婚要男方买房二胎政策等中国现象、春节的七大姑八大姨、剩女概念、重男轻女思想、高考、输在起跑线、一线城市人口爆炸现象、春运、春节、知识焦虑（中国已经变成最愿意为知识付费的国家）等等。
要求：200字以上
本次作业雨共18人参与，1人未交作业，Doer|Juli|Wo-005，已发红包；1人迟交作业Doer|郑小满|Wo-012，已发红包。
1、WO-001I韦露娟Sera|SeraTimeIN0.0-2 七年，我会一直在，愿你也不会提前出局！
Comments from 吴娟Jane :
直接以中西结合的男女主的结婚过程来描写中式婚礼上的一些差异，而不是全篇纯碎的用bride 和bridegroom来描述，更有故事性，一点不枯燥。
好词好句：
1、It’s easy for young people to fall in love, but complicated to get married.
2、follow
Revise Advice:
1、exhausting->exhausted
2、They were been together for
3 years –> have been together
4、Chinese people are tend to accept the western culture, some rituals should be obey before and during the ceremony.->tend to or are tending to or are willing to be obeyed
5、a red envelope contained money as betrothal presents-> contained with
5、after married-> after being married
6、in the abstruction of the bridesmaids 我翻译不出来。
7、But all I wander is how does Tim’s parents felt.->wonder
Comments from郭玉荣May :
长句子也不少，锻炼语言组织能力，也锻炼读者的功底，中外婚姻，两种不同的文化习俗的碰撞，这其实是个culture shock。
“Something old, something new, something borrowed, something blue”“一点旧，一点新，一点借，一点蓝”这个学到了。
Revise Advice:
1. " Just finished their wedding ceremony, they feel exhausting but sweet."这句里的非谓语Finished，改成finishing，因为finish的主语是后面这句的主语they，they和finish是主动关系，所以非谓语用ing形式。另，exhausting这种词语一般是形容人的话用ed结尾的形式，exhausted，类似的词有exciting，excited，interesting，interested等
2. "It was an Chinese-American wedding. Tim comes from Florida and Emily is an Chinese girl who went to university in America. "Chinese是辅音字母打头，所以用a，两处a Chinese
3. "They were been together for 3 years and engaged a year ago in America."这句在一起三年了，用完成时比较好
4. etiquette 应该是不可数名词
5. the groom need……groom单数
6. "to give the bride’s family a red envelope contained money as betrothal presents. "前面是a red envelope，后面是presents，单复不一致
7. "In America, the groom would bring the bride to her father for a dance before the food is served." would和is时态不一致，will吧，因为是常态化的习俗
8. "by the help of an Chinese groomsman" Chinese groomsman前面的不定冠词
9. "Tim said it was longest way he walked to get to hold Emily’s hand." the longest way最高级前加the
10. "After the tired wedding…"有一类形容词修饰人的时候一般用ed结尾的，修饰物的时候用ing结尾的，tired一般修饰人，tiring修饰物，类似的有exciting＆excited，interested＆interesting等
11. "But all I wander " wonder是我想知道，wander是漫游，游荡的意思
12. "……is how does Tim’s parents felt. "does后加动词原型
13. " his three daughters wedding fee. "加个所属格，daughter's wedding fee
14. "Cause, in China, " because做连词，cause这个词，是名词＆动词，不能用作连词，在口语当中会用这个来简化because，但是书面中不常见可读性好强！
2、WO-002郭玉荣May|生长年轮|Some Information of Confucianism
Comments from彭展翔Sohie:
把你的文章又学习了一遍，很棒的文章。用两个生动的例子引出中庸之道，然后很地道地解释了什么是中庸思想，从而引出孔子。但是感觉引出孔夫子那段有点突兀，加上一句“孔夫子是中庸思想的鼻祖”会不会更好？
Excellence：
1. Benevolence means to love others.仁者爱人
2.One should be fond of learning and not feel ashamed to ask and learn of his inferiors.不耻下问
3.It is wise to hold what you know and admit what you don't know.知之为知之，不知为不知，是智也。
4.Different people are good at different areas.各有所长。
Revise Advice:
1. Chinese believes that there must be some other people better than myself. →themselves
2. If i→if somebody
3. a unassertive attitude→an
4. As you have now had →As you now have had 语序上感觉不对
5. Confucius had said that→请教，为何用过去完成时，had said
6. One should be fond of learning and not feel ashamed to ask and learn of his inferiors.→learn from, learn of 是听到听说的意思
7. Nowadays many people afraid to face their ignorance. →be afraid to
8. They think it will bring shame on themselves to admit that they don’t know.→bring……to, if they admit their ignorance. 这里用if条件状语更好，如果承认会带来羞耻。
9. Being honest and facing oneself really needs courage.→这里谓语动词用复数？
Comments from 韦露娟Sera:
读你的文章就是科普了。没挑出啥毛病。挑个金句
Excellence:
One should be fond of learning and not feel ashamed to ask and learn of his inferior.
一个人应该乐于学习，不耻下问。
2、WO-002郭玉荣May|生长年轮|English Words Learning
Comments from陈绿春 :
介绍了些背诵单词的方法，很有意思，很有启发。前面介绍小时候记忆单词的情境，很是震撼，感觉作者小时候好强大，老师讲，就直接记住了。
Revise Advice:
1.Since I first had a class called English when I was young
2.since主要用在完成时态里，通常不跟when用在一句话里。
3.I not only found this method to memorize words.
少了个am ，按说前面有not only，后面应该加个but also.
3、WO-003|胡广Mark|马可吐文| Why I don't want a second child?
Comments from 张竞赛:
文章思路很清晰，自结婚期就梦想能有两个孩子，但政策不允许，当二胎政策放开后，笔者又不想生二胎了，并给出了三个理由：
1，成本太高，无论是金钱还是时间（妻子的角度，为好老公点赞）；
2，与儿子年龄差太大，担心代沟和交流问题（孩子的角度）
3.人呀，还是得为自己活，多享受生活（生活角度，不愧是老司机呀）。
Revise Advice:
1.A long time ago, when I got married, I had always dreamed of(前面的时间状语明显是过去的时间，后面用了过去完成时)
2.Since last year（没见过since和last year 连用的，是否可改成具体的年份如since 2016）
3.Why? Maybe you will ask me（用一个why感觉就够了，或是单用you may ask why）
4.it will take alot of cost（cost当成本的意思时是可数名词，所以应用复数costs）
5.The time cost（可去掉cost避免重复）. Children between the ages of 1 and 3 need a full
6.Escort（escort这个词太大了，一般指陪同，护卫，用在养孩子上是否不妥） , with 3 to 6 years of age requiring daily transfers（不懂表达的什么，这句是与之间的表并列吗，但无主语，无谓语）
7.Thirdly, to be a modern person in current society, first of all, to live well for yourself（let us all savor the beauty of life and live to the fullest）.
Life is not only for the next generation. I think we need more time to make our lives more exciting and colorful.
Sometime(是想表达有时吗，有时是sometimes ，而sometime是某时，可能是过去的某时，也可能是将来的某时)
the dream will be expired（是想表达梦想是有期限的吗，我想到的是every dream have a time limit，供你参考）
the late two-child policy, go to（the）hell!
4、WO-004|吴娟Jane|1J46|Spicy Gluten-The Fifth Great Invention of China
Comments from Sunnie:
1. 标题吸引眼球，用第五大发明来形容辣条，让从来不吃辣条的我都想一探究竟。
2. 配图贴切搞笑，喜欢。
3. 条理清晰，让我对辣条有了新认识，特别是它的国际化，奢侈化（在美国能卖到12刀），让我等对其不屑一顾的孩子妈也想尝试一下。
Excellence:
1.Loyal followers draw attention
2.This can’t stop something from conquering the world
Revise Advice:
1、Where there is a school, there will be all kinds of snacks sold at roadside stands in China.
查了有这样的表达：Where there is life, there is hope.不知道是不是可以把will be 改成is.
Sold 是不是应该为be sold.
be sold at stands?我感觉被卖，对应的是stands, 用by 要好一点吧。
路边摊roadside stalls；用 snacks stall on the roadside 或者路边摊有一个名词叫roadside market
2. but tips are here that spicy gluten is delicious ,but do not eat too much!
两个but, 建议改为：Warm tips: although spicy gluten is delicious , but do not eat too much!
3一些小细节：句号后面应该空一格，比如taste. Followers. Circumstances. 另外about多写了一个o.
4 两个小问题：stationary在句中是什么意思？ Hygenetic查字典没查到，不知道是什么意思？
5.this can't stop the spicy gluten from conquering the world.莫名的喜感
Comments from彭展翔Sophie :
1.as little as 0.5 yuan→价格高低用high/low
2.第3段开头这里可以加一个句子，Although spice gluten is delicious, not every one ……增加上下文的衔接性
3.建议第四五段合并成一段
4.Other trustworthy brands like Youyou is ……try too
5.最后这一句是不是加上为何不能吃太多的解释会更好——因为太辣会，可能会肚子痛，或得肠炎什么的
5、WO-005|Juli|未交作业
6、WO-006|江梦柳|Joy小开酱|Every Day Should Be the Children's Day
Comments from 韦露娟Sera:
Revise Advice:
1.It's quite joyful~It was quite joyful
2.Which is interesting and equal rights based~这样表述有点奇怪，我觉得可以改成but also the way…that they respect each other, which is interesting（这里我觉得用impressed这个形容词更好）
3.the answer I got is~was
4.she told me she's excited~she was excited
7、WO-007|Sophie|终身成长之旅|N0.4-3 The dilemma 3S Lady of China
Comments from 韦露娟Sera:
好深刻的话题，感觉我们都要当心！
Revise Advice:
1.人行为 individual behavior, action更多的是表示某一个具体的行动
2.给到她所谓的人生经验和建议用复数
3. give a birth to a baby~ give birth to
4. regarded as not final duty~看做没履行终极义务，not meeting my final duty
5. meddle in 干涉的短语
6. maybe feel~ may feel
Comments from 郭玉荣May:
整篇文章大量使用长句子，好棒！读了可以练习自己缩句找句子主干的能力。
其实这文里说的不就是我么？虽然我并米有get much wealth....但是逼谈恋爱啊，相亲啊都是遇到过了的。人言可畏，三人成虎，众口铄金，积毁销骨啊，地球太可怕了！
Revise Advice:
1. “In China, the first dilemma is the pressure of forced to be married……”
the pressure of being forced to be married. of后先加-ing再变被动。
2. the strange，strangers
3. "In China, marriage is not an individual action, it is usually related to the total family even the clan. "
两个完整句子中间没有连词，然后，结婚的话，应该是两个家庭，两个家族，这里用复数比较好
4. "If there is a suitable age girl is unmarried,"
两个谓语，girl后加who变成限定从
5. "They are usually more worried and careful about these girls marriage than herself. "
a. 这句里these girls marriage, girl加个所属格比较好的样子，these girls' marriage
b.前面用的these girls，后面的herself变成themselves.
6. "This tomb-sweeping Day, I was visiting the Mogao Caves at Dun Huang."
名词做状语的情况有，但是像这句中的this tomb-sweeping day我没有见过，也不知道能不能用。
在此把我所知道的名词做状语的情况列举一下:
a. 时间名词做状语，比如, He works day and night for his family.
b. 这种，我查了一下据说是名词做状语表让步，east or west, home is best.
还有些其他的，名词做状语表距离的，表地点的
7. "On the phone, she constantly emphasized that it is time for me to find a boy-friend and I should get married and give a birth to a baby in the next year. "
and的用法，在有三个及三个以上同等地位上的概念出现时，and只需要用在连接最后一个概念。
8. "If I do not, my grandparents would be regretful because they are elder, and I would be regarded as not finial duty if not do so. "
这句前后两个if I do not有点累赘，elder在这里想表达什么概念呢？elder多指年长的，前辈的，而且不做表语用的哟。
9. "because if I say anything going against her, I would be drowned in her spit. "
a.被口水淹没，这样表达有点直观了哈哈，可以用flooded
b. 把going去掉吧，这是我的感觉
10. "As the increase of age"这个年龄的增长用growth比较好，increase主要指的是量的增长，growth是主要指成长方面
11. "On the other hand"一般跟兄弟on the one hand 连用，可以选择in addition
12. " they are not willing to marry somebody. But it is really difficult for them to find someone is not less excellent than them.
这里find someone后跟的定语从句，加个who
13. "Surround by this message"
surround的主语是lady，被这些信息所包围环绕，所以该是surrounded
14. "Well, what is your opinion of 3s lady?"
这个of换成towards会不会好一点？
Comments from 陈绿春:
介绍了中国剩女的几种窘境，中间一段自己的例子很有意思，刚毕业，就已经被逼婚，确实是有些无奈，于是对于真正的剩女，就会有更多的感慨了。
Revise Advice:
1. If there is a suitable age girl is unmarried, the whole family would give so-called correct life experience and advice to you。
前面一句话里有两个is，看上去挺别扭的，后面to you,应该是to her.
2. They are usually more worried and careful about these girls marriage than the girl self.
前面是一般时，worried是过去时,the girl self如果用herself可能更恰当一些。
8、WO-008|肖洋|
Comments from韦露娟Sera :
看到题目很吸引人啊，看了第一段有一种不妙的赶脚，原来真的是写中国大妈。
Revise Advice:
They know the hard of life~ 用difficulty,据我所知，外国人描述困难时不太用hard, hard比较常用的意思是努力，try hard,还有硬的，this bread is hard,常用来讲黄笑话，你懂的
they are easy to get in~get in 感觉换成get involved in比较好
lost in money~lost money
talk with them~talk to them
感觉你这篇文章超有内涵，最后还升华了
Comments from郭玉荣May :
大妈现象确实好中国，哈哈哈，最后还呼吁了一下关注大妈这个群体！
Revise Advice:
1. There be 句型和have混淆了：
there be 句型是指“那里有……”
have 是指“有”
两个可以互换，但不能一起用（there have）
可以是：there is one mysterious group……
还可以是：China has one mysterious group……
2. “sthregths“ 应该是想说strength吧；
且strength这个单词，只有在做“长处”的时候才是可数名词
3. 这句“And the very hot bitcoin lately”没有谓语。。
4. can 是情态动词，后面加动词原形，can rise
5. “what the mysterious group is”这句不是宾从，所以不需要用陈述句语序，“what is the mysterious group”
6. “where does their strengths come from”这句首先strength 只有在做长处的时候才是可数的，其次，若是come from 的主语是复数，助动词需用do
7. the hard of life 如果要用hard的话，因为这个hard是个形容词，所以后面加上一个名词比较好 the hard part of life.
有一种用法是这样的the 加形容词表示一类人，比如the old， the young
8.“The dama are not others.They are right next to us.”这个表达，有点中国风，可以说dama are not be so far away
9.mother拼错啦
10. everyone 改成anyone要好一点的样子
11. Dama前面的定冠词the去掉要好一些
12.全篇读下来，建议时态再斟酌一下，简单的过去时和现在时就可以了
9、WO-009|林志文Bright|
Comments from韦露娟Sera :
非常棒，没什么语法问题。开题直接用了傅园慧的故事，引起读者兴趣，解释得干净利落。
10、WO-010| sunnie|洪荒之力prehistoric power
Comments from吴娟Jane :
Prehistoric power 原来洪荒之力是这么翻译的呀。
文章讲了洪荒之力的起源，然后是火爆网络的几个推动事件，最后讲在哪些场合来使用这个词，脉络清晰。
EXCELLENCE：
1.Spare no effort.
2.Exaggeratedly,
Revise Advice:
1、 I guess If you are a sport fan, especially like swim, you should heard of it;
should 后面应该加的是动词原形的，可以改成must have heard of it.
Swim ->swimming.
2、The Chinese pronunciation of Prehistoric power pronunciation是不是可以改为meaning。
3、The word ’ Hong Huang’ first came out of ancient legends. First came out of 可以用originated from
4、which was written in more than 1 thousand years ago in the Liang dynasty(502-557). In more than ****years ago 中的in是不是该去掉
5、when we say that I have been using the prehistoric powers, can be interpreted as I have tried my best 这里can be 前面不加个it总感觉读不顺畅。
Comments from韦露娟Sera :
感觉很棒哦，没有太多语病。
Revise Advice:
like swim~作为名词用swimming
一个短语很棒：spare no efforts
11、WO-011Mandy Szeto|Let's talk about Tomb-sweeping Festival
Comments from张竞赛 :
本文主要讲述清明节的祭祀仪式，且作者赋予这个节日以新的意义，如将其作为一种维持关系的纽带，并借节日来反思自己的生活，文章思路很清晰，排版也不错，但在拼写上有一点点小瑕疵，具体不足如下。
Revise Advice:
1. It’s one of Chinese traditional festivals in April 4th（清明节不一定每年都是4月4号吧。
2.And clanelders（猜了半天才看出来是clan elders真烧脑呀）。
3.some villagers will get to clear up the roads that leading to the cemeteries（定语从句修饰roads ，that 后面应用动词lead）, and cut down the branches which are too dense to（too......to 结构不是表示否定含义吗） hide the graves.
4.When tomb-sweeping day arrive（应该是arrives吧）, people carry wine, fruit（fruits）
5.And then all come forward to ancestor for offering food, burn（burning） paper money, burn（burning） incense and kowtow（kowtowing） and make（making）wishes（这一组句子中的动词都是跟在for后面所以都应该是for doing）
Comments from韦露娟Sera :
总感觉这句很难理解，外国人肯定很难理解
it's the most important day of sacrifice for Chinese people.
看看怎么解释要好理解一点。
鞠躬用make a bow
kowtow是唯命是从的意思
what should I add in it?What will I leave behind after I die? Do I have some work this year?排比句，有升华
12、WO-012|何成丽|迭代加维|Dongpo elbow practices
Comments from林志文Bright :
厉害了，做菜的技术很娴熟sophisticated，着眼于大局，治理国家。总的来说，你的文章框架和思路不落窠臼，估计离开校园有点久，语法生疏rusty了，不过也可以看出来你花了很多精力去查单词。
Revise Advice:
1第一行one. of a, 用的比较多是还是one of the
2.boil 这是煮沸的正确写法
3.because of sdp liked eat，直接用 Su liked it就行because＋从句because of ＋短语
4pig elbow bright and color改动一下，加个turn,再去掉color
5pan好像大多是指平底锅
6. 1hours很明显单复数有问题文章中还有几处两个单词黏在一起，记得用空格分开第一行one. of a, 用的比较多是还是one of the
Comments from韦露娟Sera:
As same as this picture指出图片，不然怕读者看不懂
must be to do~must be done或者must be cooked
until the pig elbow turn bright red color要有动词
看得我都饿了。
13、WO-013|张竞赛|行动填满人生|The birth-control policy of China
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Comments from韦露娟Sera:
when asked~when was asked
农村夫妇，用rural couples比较符合国情，countryside更倾向于是郊外的意思
birthrate pill~我猜你想说避孕药birth control pills
more oldies~老龄人用the aged
14、WO-014|LiXin|怪咖学生|If I had a foreign friend
Comments from韦露娟Sera :
史上最聪明的偷换概念，让你写中国特色，你把自己当成中国特色写进去了，活生生变成一个自我介绍。
Revise Advice:
1.because him forthright, sometimes makes others unhappy, but he is very optimistic~这整句都要修改一下。我们想表达“虽然有时候他说话直伤人，但他很乐观”
可以说Though his forthright sometimes makes others unhappy, he is optimistic.
2.are often not lonely~are usually not lonely
3.Are you the place~少了个动词可以改成Do you live in the place
4.棒棒哒，加油，下次细心一点，都把自己写成she了。
Comments from 林志文Bright:
估计这是你第一次写全英文的文章，能迈出第一步确实需要很大的决心，很不容易，加油,万事开头难。
注意几个点：
1little 和few的区别，可数名词用few
2alone 和lonely的区别
3one chinese friends去掉s
4because him(＋was) forthright.(＋ which ) sometimes或者用because of his forthright
5in a village,in a countryside去掉一个
6sincerity change sincerity用brings替换change会更好
7结尾的one chinese friend
我觉得你的文章大意是说自己以前的一些经历，还有自己的大体爱好，这里完全可以用两个自然段
15、WO-015郑小满|关耳小满|the New Year's Eve（晚交）
16、WO-016|陈绿春|鸣鹿呦呦|Panda: Our National Animal
Comments from彭展翔Sophie :
Animals have the power to be iconic symbols for a county. Many county has its own symbolic animal, For example, India have enlisted the elephant as their national animals. Russian represent themselves with bear, In China, our national animal is the panda.
1. county→country
这里的谓语动词该怎么用，我不太清楚。
Many country try to achieve peace through wars, I really want to know what is the logic.
In the world many country is multinational.世界上许多国家都是多民族共存的。
Many country have their own symbolic animal.
2. for example→前面的逗号改成句号，或者For改成小写
3. India have→India has
4. National animals→national animal
5. Russian→ the Russian
6. In china→前面的逗号改成句号或者分号。
Panda is easily recognized by the large, distinctive black patches around its eyes, over the ears, and across its round body. The name "giant panda" is sometimes used to distinguish it from the unrelated red panda.
7. is→can be，is表属性，
8. by→for,因为后面的特点，所以容易辨别。
The panda is a great source of pride in China, it is an animal that is on the verge of extinction; however, it has a long and great history. Scientists have traced the roots back to the time of the dinosaurs, hundreds of thousands of years ago.
9. The panda is a great source of pride in China, it is an animal that is on the verge of extinction.→两句话之间不能用逗号，As an extinted creature, the panda is a great source of China.
10. However后面的it指的是什么？
11. 恐龙时代是侏罗纪，有几百万年到一亿年喔！
Another reason why the panda is the animal ambassador for China is that it represents peace and friendship. Gifts of giant pandas to American and Japanese zoos formed an important part of the diplomacy of China in the 1970s, as it marked some of the first cultural exchanges between the China and the West. This practice has been termed "panda diplomacy".
12. reason why→重复了，another reason that
13. for →of
14. some of the没懂
15. the west 不严谨
The giant panda is among the world's most adored and protected rare animals, and is one of the few in the world whose natural inhabitant status was able to gain a UNESCO World Heritage Site designation.
16. Among the world's most adorable and protected rare animals，giant panda is one of the several kind of animal ……is……客观事实用is
The giant, black and white panda is the national symbol of china. The giant, black and white panda is the national symbol of china. The graceful animals are a joy to all who see them, and are a source of pride for the Chinese.
17. china→China
18. to all who see them→to the visitor
Comments from郭玉荣May :
1. "Animals have the power to be iconic symbols for a county. "power这个词主要指的权利势力自然的力量，在这里可以要是用priority怎么样？
2. "Many county has its own symbolic animal,"many 修饰可数名词复数形式，所以如果many不变，那么country就要变成复数Countries，如果变成countries了，那has就要变成have
3. "India have enlisted the elephant as their national animals. "India是单数，所以have改成has，然后这个enlist，是参军入伍的意思啊，表达的意思应该是印度将大象作为自己国家的……这样的话，可以用regard……as时态方面，现在完成时的意思是这个动作过去开始持续到现在但不知道还会不会持续下去，印度把大象当国家象征应该短期内改变不了吧，已经趋向于常态化了，所以可以直接用一般现在时
4. "Russian represent themselves with bear, In China, our national animal is the panda."Russian可做形容词，亦可做名词，做名词的时候有复数形式，鉴于你后面使用的是themselves，所以Russian得加个s
5. "The panda is a great source of pride in China, "冠词混用，前面特指the，后面泛指a，这里的panda应该是泛指吧，毕竟是任何一只大熊猫，而不是特指某一只
6. " between the China and the West. "国名前面，除非是本来就带着的，否则应该是零冠词，本来就带着的参见the United States国宝胖达的英雄事迹，哈哈哈，文章当中冠词的用法有点乱，其他的都好棒而且，据说，英国的朋友们尤其喜欢胖达，有一位四川的筒子去英国留学，寄宿家庭里，人家问ta，你来自哪里，ta说我来自中国四川，外国的家人们说哦哦哦，ta一看，嗯，这肯定是不知道四川是什么地方，然后灵机一动，说就是胖达的故乡，老外激动了，三个孩子也激动了，抱着各式各样的胖达玩偶欢迎ta
Comments from韦露娟Sera :
county~country注意拼写
总感觉a source of pride for the China 有点怪，改成pride of China可好
还有这句前面的The graceful animals,特指熊猫这种动物，用单数就好了
17、WO-017|汤宣洋|Dragon Boat Festival
18、WO-018|张俊鹏|FAULTLESS DEFENSE
Comments from韦露娟Sera :
期待早点看到你的英文文章哦。
