仿写:新概念3 第12课 Life on a desert island

仿写需要有意识地去做,先理解一段话的意思,然后梳理清楚结构(即每句话之间的关系),然后从单个句子开始临摹,最后是写作结构的临摹。


一、文本

Most of us have formed an unrealistic picture of life on a desert island. We sometimes imagine a desert island to be a sort of paradise where the sun always shines. Life there is simple and good. Ripe fruit falls from the trees and you never have to work. The other side of the picture is quite the opposite. Life on a desert island is wretched. You either starve to death or live like Robinson Crusoe, waiting for a boat which never comes. Perhaps there is an element of truth in both these pictures, but few of us have had the opportunity to find out.

译文:

我们许多人对于荒岛生活有一种不切实际的想法。我们有时想象荒岛是阳光终日普照的天堂。在那里,生活简单又美好。成熟的水果从树上掉下来,人们根本无需劳动。另一种想法恰恰相反,认为荒岛生活很可怕,要么饿死,要么像鲁滨孙那样,天天盼船来,却总没见船影。也许,这两种好像都有可信之处。但很少有人能有机会去弄个究竟。

二、段落解读

这是文章的第一段。这段自成一体,表达意思完整,可以作为一个整体来学习。这段语言比较简单,如能背下,可在口语和写作中灵活使用。从写作的角度看,这段话简要、完整地写了一件事情的两面性,对基础议论文写作有极大的参考价值。

三、句子学习

我们主要通过“临摹”和“背诵”的方式精学一段话。

临摹:提炼句型+造句


临摹句子 1:Most of us have formed an unrealistic picture of life on a desert island.

提炼句型:X have formed an unrealistic picture of Y.(注意:如果主语是单数,动词要变为“has”。)

造句示范:

a) Many people have formed an unrealistic picture of life abroad.(场景:很多人会觉得“国外比国内的月亮圆”。)

b) Many people have formed an unrealistic picture of work at state-owned companies.

c) Many people from the countryside have formed an unrealistic picture of life in big cities/megacities/metropolises.

临摹句子 2:We sometimes imagine a desert island to be a sort of paradise where the sun always shines.

提炼句型:X imagine Y to be Z. (注意:如果主语是单数,动词要变为“imagines”。)

造句示范:

a) People sometimes/frequently imagine life abroad to be relaxed, comfortable, and free from trouble.

b) People imagine work at state-owned companies to be easy and stress-free.

c) People from rural areas imagine urban life to be full of excitement/exuberance, comfort, and convenience.

背诵句子

a) The other side of the picture is quite the opposite.

b) There is an element of truth in both these pictures. 

四、段落仿写

Version A:

Most of us have formed an unrealistic picture of growing up in a well-off family. We sometimes imagine a rich family to be a sort of heaven where all desires are satisfied. Life there is happy and carefree. Servants and chauffeurs are always there for you. The other side of the picture is quite the opposite. Children have to work harder than their peers to live up to their family's expectation or prove that they are competent not because they were born with silver spoons in their mouths, but because they are hard-working. For those having extremely wealthy parents, they dream of having the same amount of privacy as normal children. Perhaps there is an element of truth in both these pictures, but few of us have had the opportunity to find out.

Version B:

Many people have formed an unrealistic picture of life abroad. They often imagine life in a foreign land to be relaxed, comfortable, and free from trouble: the houses are larger, the lawns greener, streets better lit, cars cheaper, and parking lots more spacious. Yet the other side of the picture is quite the opposite. Living abroad can be challenging/daunting. To blend in the local culture, you need to speak the language well, learn how to socialize with people from different backgrounds and with diverse views, and deal with homesickness. Perhaps there is an element of truth in both these pictures, and whether to migrate to another country is purely a personal choice.

五、作业

1. 参考第三部分的句型造句。

2. 参考第四部分的段落仿写,想一个实际和幻想差别很大的例子,写一段话

City born and city bred, most of us have formed an unrealistic picture of life in the countryside. People from urban areas may frequently imagine rural life to be peaceful, quiet, comfortable, and free from pressure. Birds chirp, chicks cheep, cats mew, and cows moo. Flowers scent the air and grass greens the ground. However, the other side of the picture is quite the opposite. Isolated from the modern civilization, people living in the countryside have little access to the colorful outside world. Most of them struggle to poor living conditions such as worrying sanitation. Perhaps there is an element of truth in both these pictures, but few of us have had the opportunity to find out.

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