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班级：L3-C        姓名：谢明洋David          学号：20193000802   "  日期：2020/5/3     作业序号（Writing Assignment...

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The given graph gives information about average carbon dioxide emissions per person in ...

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日期：2020/6/13 作业序号（Writing Assignment No.）：009 It is clear that the percentage of peop...

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日期：2020/5/31 作业序号（Writing Assignment No.）：008 题目：Write your own paragraph about the p...

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题目：Some people believe that there are many dangers associated with teenage use of call ...

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One way to solve the problem of parking in inner city areas is to have large car parks ...

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@若水Dewlight sorry

班级：L3-B    姓名:谢明洋   学号：201930008102日期：2020/04/07   作业序号 (writing Assignment No )：004

Topic: In some developed countries people become fat because they eat too much junk foo...

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班级：L3-B    姓名:谢明洋   学号：201930008102日期：2020/04/07   作业序号 (writing Assignment No )：004

Topic: In some developed countries people become fat because they eat too much junk foo...

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Topic: In some developed countries people become fat because they eat too much junk foo...

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According to the survey，most of people will choose co-ed school, not only the trend of...

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班级：L3-C        姓名谢明洋David       学号：20193000802   日期：2020/3/27   作业序号（Writing Assignment No.）：002

题目：many young people spend a lot of time on the internet without any parental supervisi...

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评改意见：本文回应了写作任务、使用了一些基本衔接手段（first of all:注意这里不是first at all; second）但语言错误较多，意义表达有较多的歧义和混乱，比较影响观点的有效传播。以下修改建议供你参考：（1）There are a lot of problems whether parents do not supervise and control.建议改为：A lot of problems would emerge if parents do not supervise and control their kid’s internet use.(2) First at all, it is not good for their body healthy, because there is radiation when Children keep watching computer or cell phone, and more serious that someone keep in their room, it is not good for spirit.建议改为：First, it is harmful for the teens physical and mental health which is due to the negative effects of computer radiation and psychological issues such as feeling isolated and depressed caused by staying at home for too long on the kids’own.(3)Second, if young people always keep care about their cell phone, maybe they will be angle for some games, and when they are talking with their friends or parents ,maybe they con not control themselves, and con not communicate With ease for their friends or parents. 建议改为：Second, if young people become addicted to their cell phone playing video games, they may lose control of themselves and can not communicate with ease with their real life friends or family members. (4)Third, some games need to recharge that you can be strong in the world of game, it is meaningless that recharge on game.建议改为：Third, it is a waste of money to recharge some meaningless computer games to maintain a strong position in the world of game.

若水Dewlight 评论自班级：L3-C        姓名谢明洋David       学号：20193000802   日期：2020/3/27   作业序号（Writing Assignment No.）：002

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题目：many young people spend a lot of time on the internet without any parental supervisi...

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题目：Some people say that playing a team sport, such as soccer or basketball, should be c...