老人与大鱼的故事在本书中占了近一半的篇幅。
这部戏中戏以钓绳下沉开始。
Just then,watching his lines,he saw one of the projecting green sticks dip sharply.
以第一条鲨鱼即将出现截止(这处转折真是神来之笔)。
The old man looked at the fish constantly to make sure it was true.It was an hour before the first shark hit him.
如果让你写,你会怎么安排剧情呢?
当然,这段戏用一句话也能概括:大鱼很厉害,双方对抗很久,最终老人赢了。
而海明威显然是有注意层次递进的。
(1)人鱼之间靠什么来表现对抗?
老人与鱼的“对手戏”除了钓绳的松紧,鱼的顽强占了上风老人只能等待,还安排老人对鱼数次隔空说话,以及老人时而焦灼时而振奋的心理独白。
中间有时会出现小鸟这种“打酱油”的角色,以及老人回忆的中断来推进剧情。
(2)大鱼怎么出场?
大鱼在这里扮演的就是一位与主角力量相当的神秘人。
它的出现也是从鱼钩一沉到拉着钓绳跑让老人猜测是个大家伙,再到让老人看到局部有了清晰的观感,再到看船下游过的阴影时的惊诧,层层递进。
(3)怎么写大鱼?
大。钓绳拉的太紧会断,因此老人手抽筋,皮肤擦破。
沉稳地拉着船周旋了三天。老人不得不生吃金枪鱼补充体力,最后“决战”时刻用意志强迫自己清醒。
而老人对鱼的认知从对手变成朋友、兄弟———孤零零的两方,一个在船上,一个在水下,谁都不肯服输,惺惺相惜,在寂寥的大海上互相陪伴。
(4)老人在这段戏里干了什么?
老人作为第一主角,戏份更为丰富。
想起了心目中的英雄。
回忆自己曾经的传奇。
有表现老人懂得很多trick的细节。比如把手伸进水里测速,不用罗盘感受方向。
还有表现老人海上生存经验丰富的戏,比如生吃金枪鱼。
与大鱼僵持不下时,老人很热血。
"I ' ll kill him though,"he said."In all his greatness and his glory."
Although it is unjust,he thought.But I will show him what a man can do and what a man endures.
"I told the boy I was a strange old man, "he said."Now is when I must prove it."
The thousand times that he had proved it meant nothing.Now he was proving it again.Each time was a new time and he never thought about the past when he was doing it.
让人动容的还有一些很“燃”的描写。比如老人太困了,说服自己不要睡强制克服困意的部分里出现了多个sleep。越是不能sleep,越拿sleep吸引你。
还有寄情于景的写法。
The clouds were building up now for the trade wind and he looked ahead and saw a flight of wild ducks etching themselves against the sky over the water,then blurring,then etching again and he knew no man was ever alone on the sea.
这句话多有画面感,又多么有诗意。